The essay has a good structure. The introduction is concise and including a critical quotation is often a brilliant way to pose a convincing argument. But, the conclusion adds little and mostly repeats what is said in the introduction. It is key that the conclusion is used for a final insight and a strong justified judgement, possibly arguing the extent to which the opening is effective, or how far the reader is able to detect the metafiction from the introduction. Such perceptive comments will gain credit, but a bland conclusion adds nothing. I liked how the essay talks of "in addition to the above" showing their ability to progress through an argument and weave together points. The opening sentence of each paragraph is good, focusing on a technique clearly. But the last sentences seem tenuous with regards to the argument, and focus on Briony in the plot rather than the effect of the opening to the novel's reception. Examiners will be looking for a sustained discussion, and often this essay can lose this slightly. Spelling, punctuation and grammar are fine.